Week 5 – Reflection

Step outline and revelations!

This week has been very weird, as I’ve been on my hols and trying to catch up from last week, so it’s odd.

But the main point is the writing coming along nicely! The step outline is wonderful and very reminiscent of the ‘Scenarios’ that we read about last week from the early days of film. In terms of structure, it is the most useful task I have ever undertaken. This story that I had all but given up on has a new life now thanks to a pep talk and the step outline. The clarity with which you can map your idea using this system is amazing, and I have adapted my treatment along side to match.

I have posted below and will have a play with it once the writing has started 🙂

Now onto drafting: very excited!

 

  1. EXT: AMY’S HOUSE. EVENING.

AMY steps out of her front door, pulling her scarf tight against the cold Winter wind. She walks to her Mother’s house, a look of bored indignation on her face.

  1. INT: AMY’S MOTHER’S HOUSE. LATE EVENING.

She steps through the front door, removing her key. She calls out the house: no response. She walks slowly up the stairs, sighing.

  1. EXT: AMY’S MOTHER’S HOUSE. NIGHT.

Sometime later, she emerges. Locking the door behind her and once again pulling her scarf tight, she continues her walk to work.

  1. INT: THE BUFFALO. NIGHT.

Amy stands behind the bar. She flicks through the various channels, finally settling on the same music channel she started with. She speaks to the two men at the bar about her Mother’s illness: awkward. A man strides into the bar. He looks around and orders a pint, sitting at a table alone: watching.

  1. INT: THE BUFFALO. LATE NIGHT.

THE MAN still sits alone, several glasses around him. The two men say their goodbyes to Amy, glance at the stranger one more time, and leave. Amy calls time and the man gets up to leave. He opens the door and turns, asking if she is Amy Cooper. She replies that she is. He smiles and asks if he can buy her a drink.

  1. INT: THE BUFFALO. LATE NIGHT.

More glasses have appeared on the table and the two sit, laughing together. He asks why she is here? She explains while pouring another round that she is stuck here. He tells her he is a time traveller, and he needs her help.

  1. INT: THE BUFFALO. LATE NIGHT.

He explains why he is there, and that her mother will call in 5 minutes: as proof. He explains that something terrible will happen if she doesn’t do as he says. She becomes angry: accusing him of preying on her situation.

  1. INT: THE BUFFALO. LATE NIGHT.

He continues to provide evidence she cannot ignore: her day tomorrow, details of her life etc. When she still doesn’t believe him he explains in detail the whole future that will occur. There is no other way. She questions him, asking why she should sacrifice? The phone rings her Mum, just as predicted.

  1. EXT: AMY’S HOUSE. MORNING.

Amy steps out of her house, the patchy with blue sky and cloud. The wind has died from the day before. She begins walking to the bus stop heading to town and watches every car passing for a clue. The Man lingers just out of sight.

  1. EXT: THE BUS STOP. MORNING.

The bus is late, as predicted. She becomes a little anxious about time. It arrives, just a little late: as predicted.

  1. INT: THE BUS. MORNING.

She remembers what the man said about the reason for the bus being late. As she steps off the bus, the bus driver looks very happy, typing on her phone: ‘I am so proud of you…’. Just as predicted.

  1. EXT. THE BUS STOP IN TOWN. MORNING.

As she steps off the bus a bird poo nearly misses her, falling inches in front of her. She looks around, shocked. He had said it would land on her head, but it missed.

  1. EXT: A STREET. MORNING.

As she walks to the newsagents around the corner, she sees two £1 coins in her path: just as predicted. She bends down to pick them up but pauses. She looks around, filled with doubt. Finally, she picks up the money.

  1. EXT: THE NEWSAGENTS. MORNING.

She stands still, staring at the push sign on the door, moving the two coins around in her hand. Finally, she pushes the door and goes in. After a minute, the arrives back out of the door and crosses the road to a bench opposite.

  1. EXT: A BENCH OPPOSITE THE NEWSAGENTS. MORNING.

She remembers the words of the man and swaps the two cards around in her hands, trying to throw off his words. After a deep breath, she scratches the first of the two: nothing. She then scratches the second: £20000. She stares tears in her eyes. She stands, takes a deep breath and walks with purpose across the road and into the shop. The man watches on.

  1. INT: THE NEWSAGENTS. MORNING.

Amy walks to the counter and asks the newsagent if she could dispose of her rubbish. She hands her two scratch cards.

  1. EXT: THE NEWSAGENTS. MORNING.

She exits the shop, leaning against the window breathing deeply. She notices the man across the road and smiles to him. He returns her smile. Amy moves away, a little lighter on her feet.

 

  1. EXT: AMY’S MUM’S HOUSE. MID-DAY.

Amy strides up to the front door, pulls out her key and enters.

  1. INT: AMY’S MOTHER’S HOUSE. MID-DAY.

She steps through the front door. She calls out the house cheerfully and bounds up the stairs, grinning.

  1. EXT: THE BENCH OPPOSITE THE NEWSAGENTS. MORNING.

Amy smiles across the road at the man and then moves cheerfully off. She waits for her to leave, then quickly crosses the road and goes into the News Agents.

  1. INT: THE NEWSAGENTS. MORNING.

The man asks the Shop Keeper for the rubbish that his ‘Wife’ had just thrown away. They laugh, and he exits in possession of the scratch card.

  1. EXT: THE NEWSAGENTS. MORNING.

Another man dressed in a similar way stands waiting outside the shop, leaning casually on the window. He congratulates him on his win, stating that the Temporal Con Committee would be impressed. That he conducted his con with style, and the mark was completely seduced by his story. They leave to cash in the winnings.

  1. EXT: THE BENCH OPPOSITE THE NEWSAGENTS. MORNING.

They cross the road and duck behind the bench, activating a device on their wrists respectively. The other man fades away, leaving The Man looking to the shop and then the scratch card: a hint of regret in his eyes. Slowly, he fades as well.

  1. INT: AMY’S MUM’S ROOM. MID-DAY.

Amy walks in to see her Mum in the bed. She smiles at her and takes her Mother’s hand. They are glad to see one another, and Amy begins her daily routine with a smile.

 

 

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